This is another poem, inspired by a picture, written for Magpie Tales.
Pianissimo
Haunted by a slant of light across the lintel,
I am left hanging now, half-heard in the stillness.
Once
you were my cradle, my nightly lullaby;
but now,
stealthily as a piano, you
have become far-distant, faint, barely audible.
I
had tried to ignore your dark blue undertones,
played pianissimo, which drew out my
tears.
I turned every trick in my last-ditch attempts.
I soft-pedalled, I turned somersaults, I tapped
and I kicked, I changed every tune but your own.
Your notes, once sacred to me, are now muted, laced
with
a whispered nuance, so I look down and
await the final,
inevitable
and most deadly silence.
Cait
O’Connor
This broke my heart....
ReplyDelete...stealthily.
(and I learned a new word and what it means, from your cool title.)
Lovely write! The line "I changed every tune but your own." was wonderful!
ReplyDeleteOh, well done!
ReplyDeleteSuch an effective analogy.
And the title is great.
=)
Bittersweet...perfect title...
ReplyDeleteToo sad.
ReplyDeleteEvocative.
Your poem made think of Chopin's etude "Revolutionary", probably my favourite one by him. What a beautiful piece. Many thanks.
ReplyDeleteGreetings from London.
Heart rending. Love the use of the piano imagery to reflect emotion.
ReplyDeleteSuch sadness...
ReplyDeleteSigh! Muted, laced with a whispered nuance. It seems so many thing are like that, these days.
ReplyDeleteBlessings and Bear hugs!
This is so sad.."I changed every tune but your own"
ReplyDeleteThis is lovely Cait ... Softly, gently ending in one solitary note.
ReplyDeleteYour beautiful poetry is blowing me away today Cait. You have honed your craft to such a fine art. Now to browse some more.....
ReplyDeleteHitting a lot of sad notes with this one! Deep and poignant indeed.
ReplyDeleteThis strikes the right chords in the heart and soul ... very beautifully written !!!
ReplyDeleteThis poem left me breathless...
ReplyDeleteyou are so very, very talented. i'm so happy i came across your writing!!
stacy lynn mar
http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/
This is poignant and well written. Beautiful analogy here.
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